Thread:PeridotThePerky/@comment-31639134-20160305232338/@comment-27276409-20160306205357

I have one suggestion, though. You should try writing in a diffirent style besides, a script style. Since you can't see the characters emotions on-screen, you need to describe what is going on visually. So instead of this:

Peridot: She's so annoying! *kicks ground*

Do this:

"She's so annoying!" Peridot yelled, kicking the dust beneath her.

In my opinion, it looks better. Just a friendly suggestion!