Thread:Pearl-Princess-Bubblegum/@comment-26462356-20150712231309/@comment-26462356-20150713001050

OK, I have read your poem now, and I do really like it, a lot.

As I said, I do not really know anything about poetry. I have never tried to write any, and I don't read very much of it either, so my opinions don't really mean much.

That said, I think you might be able to improve it a bit by paying a little more attention to the rythm, it seemed to be a bit choppy in places. I expect that rythm is probably the most difficult thing to do in poetry. In a way (I think) writting a poem is rather like writting a song, but the music is only rythm and no melody.

Now I have never written any songs, or poetry, so really my opinion is more likely than not to be completely wrong.

However I hope it is of some use to you.