Thread:KinguvX/@comment-26462356-20160203221108/@comment-26462356-20160211041720

Let me say first that you are a pretty good writer, you really just need to watch out for minor spelling and such. I make lots of mistakes like that too, so not that big a deal.

Over all I liked it, but  I thought that part of the idea for this story might not quite make sense though, at least not to me.

According to Peridot, Amethyst probably emerged from the Kindergarten some 500 years after it was shut down. Since it was shut down by the rebellion, 5000 years ago, that would mean she is something like 4500 or so years old.

It has been stated a couple of times that the Gems do not change or grow after they emerge, that they remain the same, even if their appearance might occasionaly change as a result reforming after being poofed. So I would not think Amethyst will get any stronger over time, instead I would think that she always had the same strength.

You might say instead that Amethyst needed more training, by Pearl, before going on missions, but it is hard to imagine Amethyst having the patience to be trained by Pearl, or maybe not. Her needing more training seems to imply that the CGs only found Amethyst a short while before Greg showed up. On the ohter hand the Temple Fusion statue seems to imply that Amethyst has been with them for a very long time, as does the painting from So Many Birthdays and her presence in Historical Friction.

If you agree with me, then it should be relatively easy to reset the story to much earlier, just by removing the references to Vidalia, and making some change to the reason for Amethyst and Pearl staying behind. If you do that then the story could have happened any time, even thousands of years ago.